In the darkness
That surrounded me
Despite the brightness
All around me
I was plunging into depths
Where I was loosing the
capacity to bounce back
Losing all hope
I was lost
I felt there is no scope
for me to move on
go on, walk on.
the tears had dried
My heart was heavy
Some emotions wanted
to flow, some I just
Tried to hold
groping in the darkness,
I was gasping
trying to hang on to
a ray of light
a ray of hope
I found none.
I was shuddering
My insides were churning
I was praying
Then you came along
Your eyes shone,
Bright with delight,
Infectious,
I looked into them
I found a fine tune
Playing
As if life is a song
Song of love, hope
trial, patience,
Error and resurrection,
you gave me strength
to move on
to set my eyes
on a new goal
travel on a new path
for a new journey
readjust in the
existing scenario
and find my new role
As seasons change
so do fate
For renewed desires
Its never too late
when you found me
hazed and dazed
you gave me rose petals
on my palm
And you said:
Ephemeral they are
these beautiful flowers
love they shower
fragrance they spread
long after
you have plucked them
their quality they sustain
rose will be rose
Rose will be rose
wherever they bloom
whether seasons of
delight or gloom
Bloom they must!
So should you!
Beautifuly written dear! totally loved it! Great going.
ReplyDeleteThanx Samar :)
Deleteabsolutely stunning,after a long time something scintillating finally from KD,good work
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Critic
Thanx dearest critic, as it comes from you I am assured that it must be truly scintillating, as you never hesitate to point out my mistakes.. :)
DeleteIts short, sweet and senti. So true! roses are roses no matter what season! keep rocking.
ReplyDeleteThanks, yes roses are roses, and as they maintain their true character and inner qualities, even we should strive for the same.
DeleteLoved the closing lines, "bloom they must and so should you". The search to find yourself and then finding the answers to the questions that troubled you, you have sketched a wonderful journey of words Kislaya.
ReplyDeleteThanx Reshma, if we look around, we can find constant source of strength and inspiration from people around us as well as nature. Truly nature is the biggest teacher if we want to learn from it. :)
DeleteWow! very nice.
ReplyDeleteThanx Rajesh!
DeleteBloom they must!
ReplyDeleteSo should you! n .. keep this blog blooming with such a nice n lovely poems :)
Thanx for the lovely compliment Ankur, I hope I live up to the expectations :)
Deletewow absolutely beautiful lines.. :)
ReplyDeleteThanx Meera :)
DeleteGood to see you back! Lovely.
ReplyDelete:) thanks dear!
DeleteSuper like !! that struggle and fight back so well portrayed !
ReplyDeleteThanx Aziz :)
DeleteKislaya, this beautiful poem has touched the very core of the heart. So emotional, sweet and tender.
ReplyDeleteThanx Usha ji, I m happy that it could evoke such emotions :)
Deleteand now i know why rose is considered the symbol of love and no other flower !!well stitched Kislya..
ReplyDeletehands of comfort ..
voice to soothe..
disrupting moments in life..
only love makes it smooth.
:)
You are always a pleasure to read !! :)
Thanx Nitesh for such a beautiful comment in the form of verse,
Deletethat was really adorable and lovely
and it brought a big smile on my face,
see :D :D :)
beautifully written
ReplyDeletenicely carved...deep thoughts...especially towards the end...
ReplyDeleteThanx Sreedev for appreciating!
DeleteNice inspiring and motivating....life is all about moving forward..
ReplyDeleteYes thank you :)
Deletecall rose any other name it's still fragrant.nice tribute to a flower adored mostly by lovers.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a pretty little poem :)
ReplyDeleteThanx so much:)
DeleteBeautiful. Loved it, specially the end part.
ReplyDeleteOh thank you Sourav!
Deletewow! that was beautiful!
ReplyDeleteGlad u liked it :)
DeleteNicely articulated!!
ReplyDeleteLike like!!
Thank you, thank you!
DeleteKeep visiting Kriti :)
Inspirational...rose is a rose and it will bloom no matter if it's hazy or gloom...this should be the attitude of humans as well...!!!
ReplyDeleteDefinitely yes, that is what I wanted to portray through this poem.
DeleteThanx :)
I love roses and love can be like a rose. Loved your poem.
ReplyDeleteThanx Janu
DeleteWell put!! the last lines were exceptionally beautiful
ReplyDeleteA very warm welcome to my blog, hope to see you more.
DeleteThanx for appreciating, glad you liked the concluding lines :)
very good....i am astounded...
ReplyDeleteOh thank you Ritesh :)
Deletevery well written and is full of positivity :) Great work Kislaya!
ReplyDeleteThanx Jiggyasa for getting the essence... :) :)
DeleteAweeee....struck the chord :))
ReplyDeleteWonderful read it is :))
:) :) happy that it struck the chord
DeleteThank you :)
That's excellent Kislaya :) great going!
ReplyDeleteThanx Kajal for encouraging words!
DeleteBeautiful poem!!! I love the way it is built up, from a feeling of despair to hope - and then the absolutely beautiful ending! Thank you for this.
ReplyDeleteI am happy that you found it good, and thanx for appreciating the transition in the poem :)
DeleteWell written for the prompt.
ReplyDeleteLovely. . . :)
ReplyDeleteHave a nice day!
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Thanx Indrani and our Jaipur ! :)
ReplyDeleteLove has a way of touching us deeply - like the beauty of a rose! I love the depth of emotions you've touched here.
ReplyDeleteMy only feedback would be minor grammar points, Kislaya, which I'd be happy to discuss with you, if you are open to do so.
Thanx Corinne for the honest feedback, I am glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteYes I am open to discuss it and I have mailed you regarding that. Thanx
Kislaya. That is amazing. I do hope everyone finds, and gets to keep, Love.
ReplyDeleteThanx Ava fot liking. Keep visiting!
DeleteEmotional n inspirational at d same time...simply d best!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much dear! :) keep visiting...
DeleteVery sweet and romantic. Loved the way you wove a story into your poem. Such a simple gift of love. Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteDropping by from Write Tribe
Thanx Suzi, the gift of love is really wonderful and amazing!
Delete:)
bloom they must and so should you...love that last bit....i can def relate to the first part as i was in a rough place when my eventual wife found me as well....wonderful verse
ReplyDeleteThanx Brian for sharing your experience, it feels good to read something that you can relate with, I am happy that you could relate with this poem :)
Deletegood to see you at dverse as well...smiles.
DeleteSame here :)
DeleteThis is an amazing poem Kislaya. Really loved the words and its meaning. Amazing flow and powerful words.
ReplyDeleteThanx Anand for the visit.
DeleteI am glad you liked :)
It is wonderful to find love, isn't it? Love can change one's world.
ReplyDeleteThanks for taking part in Poetry Pantry.
Yes, love is the essence of life :)
DeleteA rose, a red rose in particular depicts love. Nice emotions.
ReplyDeleteWonderful!
ReplyDeleteZQ
:) thanx
DeleteVisiting again from dVerse! Rose petals on my palm -- what wonderful romantic symbolism. Love your poem really.
ReplyDelete:) thanx Mary!
Delete"Bloom they must, so should you" - it is something that we all know but we forget during hard times.....Beautifully written Kislaya:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Shwets, in the rat rat race of life many times we forget to live truly or are so lost in the problems that we need a push, a motivator, and our loved ones come to our rescue.
Deletehey it's nice to come to your blog ... and I loved this verse ... quite poignant and truthful ... :)
ReplyDeleteDear Kislaya, Bloom they must. Perfect title for one's own inner blooming, the metaphorical, as well as the realistic and oh-so-precious petals placed in your hand. It's a good reminder to take along with times are tough.
ReplyDeleteNo matter how hard things got for me with manic depression, I have always felt there was something about to bloom inside me, and that alone got me through. But having rose petals pressed into your hand, MAN, that is a beautiful image. Namaste, Amy