Tuesday, May 21, 2013

BETRAYAL

In the shimmering 
Moonlight, you left
Me shuddering



Inspired by the theme at

50 comments:

  1. Nice, short but a good read.

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  2. wallah !! super fantastic ! I tell u .. ur best at it !! :)

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  3. There is a story in those words ! so touching !

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  4. Wow! Poignant and beautiful

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  5. Beautifully worded the agony of the betrayed one!!

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  6. By moonlight, we generally think of romance. But you have liked moonlight with betrayal, that's interesting. Lovely lines.

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    1. Thats what betrayal is all about, best things become worst.
      Thnx

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  7. Betrayal is debilitating ultimately affecting both parties with no clear winners! Nicely Kislaya!

    Hank

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    1. Yes you are right, its a nightmare one shouldnt have.

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  8. Facing reality is almost always a chilling experience.

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  9. Kislaya like you understand my comics I think I find your poetry next level. So beautiful... loved it

    Richa

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  10. 'Shimmering moon & shuddering', beautiful imagery.

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  11. Love the contrast of the beauty of nature and the beastly human nature...

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  12. finally a good haiku from you after a long time

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  13. Oh this is mysterious and good x I want to know more!

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    1. Hmmm, but I guess for now thats the end of the story.....betrayal!

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  14. Beautifully sad haiku! Nice take on the prompt. :)

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  15. Short but soulful Haiku.

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  16. oh heck...you create an intense image in just few lines..

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  17. short, straight and sad but very well expressed.

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  18. I think this Haiku has a dual tone. One of ecstasy as well as that of betrayal. You've taken the one of betrayal but it's still ambiguous, don't you think?

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  19. What I want to portray here is that the girl is waiting, as you said in an elated mood, in the most romantic moment, but in that very moment of ecstasy she is betrayed and her 'to be' best moment becomes her worst moment.

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  20. Great impact with your well chosen words!! Excellent!!

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  21. Wel i dnt quite undstand haikus.....i duno how ppl pull it off.....

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    1. Earlier even I didnt, but once got to know the rules and I started writing it myself, got a hang of it,
      There is beauty of expression in less words, multiple Inerpretations, and various angles to look at it from a readers perspective. I m sure if you try you will find it interesting.

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